The papers I am including in my portfolio is the news story, the application essay, the trend essay and proposal essay.
I am including the news story in my portfolio because personally I feel that that was my best piece. I think I did a good job interviewing the person on the subject I was talking about and got a lot of information. I also liked how I incorporated the interview into my piece. I am using the application essay for one of my portfolio pieces because I think it came out good because I was talking about a subject that interested me. I think I did a good job of talking about what the prompt was asking. I discussed in great detail why I was interested in that major and some of the experiences I have had in the subject. I also talked a little bit about why I thought picking that school would be the best choice. The third piece I am choosing for my portfolio is the trend essay. The trend I choose for the essay was something I am interested in. I knew I was going to do the essay on the subject right away. I feel that the trend I choose was a very popular trend and it shows in the graph I provided. I think I gave good cause and effects of divorce, the trend I chose. The fourth essay I chose for my portfolio is the proposal essay. I chose this as one of the portfolio pieces because the subject was something I felt strongly about. I talked about something that I could relate to. I also think my solution to the problem is a realistic solution and could solve some of the problem.
The news story assignment called for writing a story on a local newsworthy subject. We were asked to talk, in detail, about the story and interview one person who is directly involved in the story. The application essay called for choosing a prompt from a college website and addressing what it is asking you. When writing this essay we had to give evidence that we understood what was being asked and to have an understanding of who we were addressing this to. The trend essay called for writing about a trend. We had to use at least two scholory articles to provide evidence. Also, talk about the causes and effects of the trend. The proposal essay called for addressing a problem in your community or at the college. We were asked to state the problem clearly and propose a possible solution to the problem. Also, use one source from online or a newspaper.
Some changes I made in the news story piece was coming up with a conclusion. I did not have a conclusion on my first draft but after giving it some thought I was able to come up with a good one. I also chose a name of a newspaper and a headline. For the application essay I made a few changes. For example, in the first draft I didn't mention the name of the school. But in the second draft I talked a little bit about why I chose that school and why I thought I was going to get the best education there. For the trend essay my partner suggested was making the causes and effects a little bit clearer. I can see how a reader might not think I had the causes and effects. She also suggested I could talk about when divorce rate peaked. Also what effects does my trend, divorce, have not someone's self esteem. Some changes I made to the proposal essay is making it clearer what the problem I was talking about was. I was talking about how waiting in line to get books took a long time but in my paper I stated that the cost of books is very high.
Monday, December 14, 2009
Monday, December 7, 2009
Assignment #6: "Trend essay" (first draft)
Take a second to think about how many people you know who have been through a divorce. I'm willing to bet that everybody at least knows one person who has gotten a divorce. Divorce seems so common now a days. Usually when I hear that somebody is getting married, I don't think about if it will last, I think about how long it will last. Why has the divorce rate increased? Why has it become such a trend?
“According to the current divorce rate statistics, 50% of marriages end in divorce.” Divorce rate in America after the first marriage is from 41% to 50%. Divorce rate after the second marriage is from 60% to 67%. The divorce rate actually goes about from the first marriage to the second marriage. It only rises higher after the third marriage were 73% to 74% of marriages end in divorce. American marriages also last longer if the women grew up with both parents: “White women who were raised by a two-parent family have a 29 percent chance that their marriage will end after 10 years of marriage. But a white women who was raised without an intact family has a 41 percent chance that her marriage will end in the same period” (Bramlett and Mosher). Black women who grew up with both parents in the household decreases the chances that the women will get a divorce.
Statistics show that it is very common for couples without children to get a divorce: “Sociologists believe that childlessness is also a common cause of divorce. The absence of children leads to loneliness and weariness and even in the United States, at least 66 percent of all divorced couples are childless.”
Kids seem to keep a marriage intact. More often then not couples are less likely to divorce if they have children: “Which is particularly interesting because study show that happiness in a marriage decreases once children are born” (Faust). But having children is no reason to stay in a marriage. Sometimes in order to fix a marriage, people have children. Divorce on children often has a negative effect: “Adjustment to the changes in the family is affected by the degree to which parents are able to continue positive relationship with their children despite conflict with the other parent” (Raab). After a divorce, one of the worst things you could do is ask children to carry information between parents. Don't get the children involved with your arguments and problems: "The lesson here is simple. Destructive comments about your ex can impact your children in many negative ways. It creats anxiety and insecurity. It raises their level of fear. It makes them question how much they can trust you and your opinions --or trust themselves. And it adds a level of unhappiness into their lives that they do not need...or deserve" (Sedacca). Also tell your child or children that it is not your fault. So many young kids come to the conclusion that their parents splitting up is their fault.
The financial troubles in American are causing rifts in people's marriages. More so then usual. Financial issues have been a top cause for divorce for a while now. But many people are losing their jobs and are having trouble brining in money and it is causing marriages to become strained:
“The need of the hour is for the couples who think that
credit crunch is making their life worse , money worries
is causing more clash , and the only thing that can rescue
them is a divorce! Unfortunately that's really not the wise
way out, in fact divorce can provoke much more financial
qualms and it's not at all an easy ride! A bad economy got
its pro's and cons on marriages. What actually determines
the chance of a marriage's triumph is the determination and
strength of will of the people involved in it!" (Kalid).
So even though people are having trouble in their marriages they can't afford to get a divorce. Many people are staying together because they don't have the money to go through a long divorce or pay child support. In many cases it is just easier to stay together.
Divorce affects everyone. It effects the couple and their relationships in the future. And it especially effects the children. Although staying in an unhappy marriage for your kids is never good, its just as bad seperating the kids from one of their parents.
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"After Divorce: Bashing Your Ex Is Bad News For Your Children." Basilandspice.com 29 Nov. 2009. General OneFile. Web. 7 Dec. 2009..
“According to the current divorce rate statistics, 50% of marriages end in divorce.” Divorce rate in America after the first marriage is from 41% to 50%. Divorce rate after the second marriage is from 60% to 67%. The divorce rate actually goes about from the first marriage to the second marriage. It only rises higher after the third marriage were 73% to 74% of marriages end in divorce. American marriages also last longer if the women grew up with both parents: “White women who were raised by a two-parent family have a 29 percent chance that their marriage will end after 10 years of marriage. But a white women who was raised without an intact family has a 41 percent chance that her marriage will end in the same period” (Bramlett and Mosher). Black women who grew up with both parents in the household decreases the chances that the women will get a divorce.
Statistics show that it is very common for couples without children to get a divorce: “Sociologists believe that childlessness is also a common cause of divorce. The absence of children leads to loneliness and weariness and even in the United States, at least 66 percent of all divorced couples are childless.”
Kids seem to keep a marriage intact. More often then not couples are less likely to divorce if they have children: “Which is particularly interesting because study show that happiness in a marriage decreases once children are born” (Faust). But having children is no reason to stay in a marriage. Sometimes in order to fix a marriage, people have children. Divorce on children often has a negative effect: “Adjustment to the changes in the family is affected by the degree to which parents are able to continue positive relationship with their children despite conflict with the other parent” (Raab). After a divorce, one of the worst things you could do is ask children to carry information between parents. Don't get the children involved with your arguments and problems: "The lesson here is simple. Destructive comments about your ex can impact your children in many negative ways. It creats anxiety and insecurity. It raises their level of fear. It makes them question how much they can trust you and your opinions --or trust themselves. And it adds a level of unhappiness into their lives that they do not need...or deserve" (Sedacca). Also tell your child or children that it is not your fault. So many young kids come to the conclusion that their parents splitting up is their fault.
The financial troubles in American are causing rifts in people's marriages. More so then usual. Financial issues have been a top cause for divorce for a while now. But many people are losing their jobs and are having trouble brining in money and it is causing marriages to become strained:
“The need of the hour is for the couples who think that
credit crunch is making their life worse , money worries
is causing more clash , and the only thing that can rescue
them is a divorce! Unfortunately that's really not the wise
way out, in fact divorce can provoke much more financial
qualms and it's not at all an easy ride! A bad economy got
its pro's and cons on marriages. What actually determines
the chance of a marriage's triumph is the determination and
strength of will of the people involved in it!" (Kalid).
So even though people are having trouble in their marriages they can't afford to get a divorce. Many people are staying together because they don't have the money to go through a long divorce or pay child support. In many cases it is just easier to stay together.
Divorce affects everyone. It effects the couple and their relationships in the future. And it especially effects the children. Although staying in an unhappy marriage for your kids is never good, its just as bad seperating the kids from one of their parents.
---
"After Divorce: Bashing Your Ex Is Bad News For Your Children." Basilandspice.com 29 Nov. 2009. General OneFile. Web. 7 Dec. 2009.
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